My first impression was that the top one works generally speaking, and so I give you a 2 star in "Vision".
Going deeper in the critique, I find the size ratio between the symbol and the typography a bit out of proportion. I would slightly reduce the symbol so it doesn't separate so much of the text in terms of attention: one is shouting hard while the other is whispering, even though the text is capitals only.
Except for the first mock-up, the disposition of elements is either cliché or naive (thus the half star in originality and technique).
I see a gap between the "spoken language" of the symbol and the text's. It is very hard to make a great logo using common serif fonts and numbers. Why don't you draw in your font? Give it a try, you'll see.
I like the overlay of the three 9's because it creates a certain visual distortion just like in those animation films which require special glasses. This is the reason why I give you a 3 star at impact, it stands out as the vibrant and preponderant element of the layout.
Overall, I think you have a long long way to run until you get a good, solid and memorable logo, and so I leave you with this piece of advice: try using a sans serif with non capital characters. Something that speaks the same language as the symbol, more fun, modern and at the same time with a couple of interesting details - finding some connections between the letters will add up in originality for sure.
Going deeper in the critique, I find the size ratio between the symbol and the typography a bit out of proportion. I would slightly reduce the symbol so it doesn't separate so much of the text in terms of attention: one is shouting hard while the other is whispering, even though the text is capitals only.
Except for the first mock-up, the disposition of elements is either cliché or naive (thus the half star in originality and technique).
I see a gap between the "spoken language" of the symbol and the text's. It is very hard to make a great logo using common serif fonts and numbers. Why don't you draw in your font? Give it a try, you'll see.
I like the overlay of the three 9's because it creates a certain visual distortion just like in those animation films which require special glasses. This is the reason why I give you a 3 star at impact, it stands out as the vibrant and preponderant element of the layout.
Overall, I think you have a long long way to run until you get a good, solid and memorable logo, and so I leave you with this piece of advice: try using a sans serif with non capital characters. Something that speaks the same language as the symbol, more fun, modern and at the same time with a couple of interesting details - finding some connections between the letters will add up in originality for sure.